Dream Deep

Ooh... this was really good, Wiggy. Really good. I definitely enjoyed it, only one thing, perhaps, to say - you may want to place your line breaks a bit more ...

Much thanks, Trident! ^_^ I value your advice and I very much appreciate what you have to say. As to the aspects that you say need some work: thanks for ...

Er... Alanna. This strikes me rather as better material for a blog entry, not exactly poetry. Fine message, I suppose, but this really is not poetry.

Hi Chibi! Nice to meet you and welcome to the site. ^_~ ~Dreamy

Oy... thank you all - Jacquie, Trident, Imp, Snoink - for the comments and critiques. At the moment I seem to be working on Draft #3 of the Chair (yes, ...

Thanks a lot, Phorcys! *she said, at the risk of being hopelessly redundant in conjunction with the above posts* ^_~

Granted, but now that you can't procrastinate you have nothing to do and this lack of activity drives you insane. I wish I had a different writing style!

Great great great. Wonderful in fact. :razz: Just one thing, perhaps: How I long for your embrace, Your warm lips upon my face. You might want to change the second ...

As much as I respect and value your opinions, both as a writer and an great friend, are you sure about that? I don't particularly care for my style myself ...

I must agree with Write Me - I understand the attmepted purpose and message behind this poem, but it didn't come across very well. The structure and wording in several ...

Ach! Cass seems to be in the lead! Hurry Jack! ^_^ (And congrats, Cass.)

Imp: Tov. Nice. ;)

I agree with Roxanne and Write Me. I can tell you're describing a photograph from the title, and even the first line might work towards this idea. But afterwards you ...

Fand: Muahahahaha, worship us for we have been knighted. ^_~ ^ Pros: 2/10 quite boring and utterly meaningless to anyone who can't read cryllic

^ 8/10, well-said, Jack. ^^